I like the turning of the phrase "rest in peace" and the way "rest" stitches the stanza together. Also, "sleeve of dirt" is an excellent sort of kenning. I'm confused by the worms "alertTo less than me." Are they alert to lesser things than me, or are they alert to less than I am?
My body, on which these worms feed, is, now that it is dead, less than me.
Oh boy. I didn't pick up on that meaning. I was thinking that you were spiritually alive and thus more alert to true reality than physically living worms. I know this is poetry but aren't you bending things a little too much by not making some punctuation after "Remains" or at least adding the word "and" after it? I know it is the first word of the line but it is the end of a thought - unless I am again reading it wrong.
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